Some quick shayari, tell me what you think

Sardi ki dhoop hai tu Garmi ki shaam hai, Bahar ka phool hai tu Meri khizaan ka jawab hai.

I've been reading and trying to learn poetry/shayari for the past couple of months. At most I've come up with two lines, but this is the first time I managed a stanza.

I know the thought isn't wholy original, but I just thought of it after finishing up a long phone conversation.

Let me know.